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Unit 11: Essay Writing

Topic:

What should happen to students who are caught cheating on an exam? Why?

Steps to follow:

1.      Brainstorm the ways of punishment or correction
2.      Write a thesis statement in the introduction with a controlling idea.
3.      Write the bodies to support your thesis statement
4.      Write transitional words between the bodies
5.      Write a conclusion paragraph to restate your ideas 

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Draft:

The Consequence of Cheating Students

        In Taiwan, everyone considers grades on tests as the most important thing all their life. Not only parents but teachers reckon great grades are everything, which causes students are eager to get the best grades with all their might unscrupulously. Therefore, they cheat on the tests. Though all that students doesn’t cheat on the test, some students may cheat in every class. When those cheating on exams are found, something will happen to those cheating.

        First of all, those found out cheating may get zero on their tests. Teachers reckon that those cheating shouldn’t get any scores. The teachers think it’s the best way to make them not do such a deed again. The reason why teachers do that is that students care about their grades; therefore, they won’t do it again. It’s the best lesson for those cheating.

        In addition to get zero on the tests, students will feel humiliated at the time when they are found cheating. Teachers may shout out or cross-examine right away. Questioned, students regard it as an insult to be cross-examined. They feel humiliated as their classmates will laugh at them in front of cheating students. It will be a humiliation in their life.

        Based on what’s mentioned above, it is an eternal brand of a cheat for cheating students in their life. No matter what they will be, the brand will company with them for good. People will jeer at them, which makes them hurt. Not to cheat is the only way to keep them from hurt. Realizing the consequence of cheating students, no one wouldn’t cheat on any exams.

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Teacher's advice:

The Consequence of Cheating Students

        In Taiwan, everyone considers grades on tests to be the most important thing in their life. Not only parents but teachers reckon great grades are everything, which causes students who are eager to get the best grades with all their might unscrupulously. (**”cause”用法: cause sth(sb) to be (可省略) +adj): causes students eager to get ----)Therefore, they cheat on the tests. Though all that students don’t Though not all students cheat on the test, some of them may cheat in every class. When those cheating on exams are found, something will happen to them.

        First of all, those found out cheating may get zero on their tests. Without giving them any points, teachers may prohibit them from doing such a deed again. The reason why teachers do that is that students care about their grades; therefore, they won’t do it again. It’s the best lesson for those cheating on exams.

        In addition to getting zero on the tests, students will feel humiliated at the time when they are found cheating. The shouting, scolding or cross-examination from a teacher is an insult to the cheating students. They feel humiliated as their classmates will laugh at them in their presence. It will be a humiliation for the rest of their life.     Based on what’s mentioned above, it is an eternal brand in their life. No matter what they will be, the brand will stick to them for good.They will feel hurt because people jeer at them.Not to cheat is the only way to keep them from hurt. Realizing the consequence of cheating on exams, no one will won’t cheat any more.

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Revise:

The Consequence of Cheating Students

        In Taiwan, everyone considers grades on tests to be the most important thing in their life. Not only parents but teachers reckon great grades are everything, which causes students who are eager to get the best grades with all their might unscrupulously. Therefore, they cheat on the tests. Though all that students don’t cheat on the test, some of them may cheat in every class. When those cheating on exams are found, something will happen to them.

        First of all, those found out cheating may get zero on their tests. Without giving them any points, teachers may prohibit them from doing such a deed again. The reason why teachers do that is that students care about their grades; therefore, they won’t do it again. It’s the best lesson for those cheating on exams.

        In addition to getting zero on the tests, students will feel humiliated at the time when they are found cheating. The shouting, scolding or cross-examination from a teacher is an insult to the cheating students. They feel humiliated as their classmates will laugh at them in their presence. It will be a humiliation for the rest of their life.

        Based on what’s mentioned above, it is an eternal brand in their life. No matter what they will be, the brand will stick to them for good. They will feel hurt because people jeer at them. Not to cheat is the only way to keep them from hurt. Realizing the consequence of cheating on exams, no one won’t cheat any more.

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