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Summary Writing

Write a summary of Steve Jobs’ speech as shown in the following:

Notice: Your summary should be limited to 150-180 words, which should include
Where, who, when, and what.

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Draft:

Summary

        Steve Jobs addressed this lecture at Stanford in 2005. He told three stories in it. The first one was about connecting the dots. He said people couldn’t connect the dots looking forward; people could only connect them looking backwards. People believing these dots would connect down the road, and would give them the confidence to follow their heart even when it led them off the well-worn path and that would make all the difference. The second one was aboutlove and loss. He said sometimes life hit people in the head with a brick, but they shouldn’t lose faith. People had got to find what they loved and to love what you do. The last one was about death. He had ever read an old saying, "If you live each day as if it was your last, someday you'll most certainly be right." When facing death, people reckoned almost everything just fell away in the face of death, leaving only what was truly important. Therefore, they would stay hungry, stay foolish.

Abstract from script:

who: Steve Jobs

Where: at Stanford
when: 2005
what: three stories

      1.          about connecting the dots

you can't connect the dots looking forward; you can only connect them looking backwards.

believing these dots will connect down the road will give you the confidence to follow your heart even when it leads you off the well-worn path and that would make all the difference.

2.          about love and loss

Sometimes life hits you in the head with a brick. Don't lose faith. You've got to find what you love. And that is as true for your work as it is for your lovers.

And the only way to do great work is to love what you do.

3.          about death

"If you live each day as if it was your last, someday you'll most certainly be right."

Remembering that I'll be dead soon is the most important tool I've ever encountered to help me make the big choices in life. Because almost everything — all external expectations, all pride, all fear of embarrassment or failure - these things just fall away in the face of death, leaving only what is truly important.

No one wants to die. Even people who want to go to heaven don't want to die to get there. And yet death is the destination we all share.

Your time is limited, so don't waste it living someone else's life.

And most important, have the courage to follow your heart and intuition. They somehow already know what you truly want to become. Everything else is secondary.

Stay Hungry. Stay Foolish.

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Teacher's advice:

Summary

        Steve Jobs told three stories from his life in the commencement speech at Stanford in 2005.(combine the two sentences: Steve Jobs told three stories from his life in the commencement speech at------) The first one was about connecting the dots. He remarked people couldn’t connect the dots looking forward; instead, they could only connect them looking backwards. The belief that these dots will connect in the future will give people confidence to follow their heart even when it led them off the well-worn path and that would make all the difference. (rephrase: The belief that these dots will connect in the future will give people confidence to ---) The second one was aboutlove and loss. He asserted sometimes life hit people in the head with a brick, but they shouldn’t lose faith. People had got to find what they loved and to love what they do.(wrong pronoun) The last one was about death. He had read an old saying, (usage) "If you live each day as if it was your last, someday you'll most certainly be right." In face of death, people will discard everything insignificant and leave only what was truly important. (rephrase: in face of death, people will discard everything insignificant and leave only what----)  Therefore, he strongly suggested that the graduating students will stay hungry, stay foolish. (rephrase: he strongly suggested that the graduating students ----)

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Summary

        Steve Jobs told three stories from his life in the commencement speech at Stanford in 2005.The first one was about connecting the dots. He remarked people couldn’t connect the dots looking forward; instead, they could only connect them looking backwards. The belief that these dots will connect in the future will give people confidence to follow their heart even when it led them off the well-worn path and that would make all the difference.  The second one was aboutlove and loss. He asserted sometimes life hit people in the head with a brick, but they shouldn’t lose faith. People had got to find what they loved and to love what they do. The last one was about death. He had read an old saying, "If you live each day as if it was your last, someday you'll most certainly be right." In face of death, people will discard everything insignificant and leave only what was truly important. Therefore, he strongly suggested that the graduating students stay hungry, stay foolish.

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